Mrs Miles presented with her daughter who is concerned she may have dementia.
Can you identify the problem in this sentence?
There are two women in the sentence: Mrs Miles and ‘her daughter’. Using the female pronoun, ‘she’ is therefore confusing. Is the daughter concerned she has dementia or her mother has dementia?
It’s important to pay close attention to this when using pronouns to make sure they don’t end up causing confusion to the reader. They are a grammar device to avoid repetition and add clarity but, in the example, above create the opposite effect.
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Answer: Mrs Miles presented with her daughter who is concerned her mother may have dementia.